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“I thought I wanted to play with you. I like playing. Makes the game a bit more interesting.” He felt her tremble under his touch and a wave of exhilaration swept through him. As good as sex, really. “You’re not very interesting though and I’m afraid the games won’t last very long this time.”

“Huh?” she whimpered, this time with fear sending a quiver through the syllable that stretched it more than a southern drawl ever could. He felt the slightest smile twitch on his face as he soaked in the fear overflowing from her eyes and trickling down her cheeks.


Read the serialized version of Forever After from the beginning: Chapter 1.

Photo credit: Megyarsh / Foter.com / CC BY

4/7/2013 01:57:35 am

You totally built the tension there! Well done!

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Danielle Forrest
4/7/2013 12:34:08 pm

Well, that's one of my favorite things when writing. I'm not good at much of any other emotions personally, so tension is something tangible I can try to make the reader feel. I've always felt a good book makes you feel something viscerally.

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4/7/2013 02:29:47 am

Chilling! Great snippet. The photo is great, too.

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Danielle Forrest
4/7/2013 12:34:38 pm

Thanks! I loved that photo. I thought it was perfect when I finally found it.

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4/7/2013 05:46:58 am

Is this a dom thing? ;-) Is he just teasing her? Love it. . . want to read more.

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Danielle Forrest
4/7/2013 12:35:43 pm

Nope, not a dom thing. Although, now that I'm reading it out of context, I could see where someone might think that. More a serial killer thing.

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4/7/2013 06:28:57 am

So very creepy. Well done!

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Danielle Forrest
4/7/2013 12:36:29 pm

<bows> Well, I've always been fond of creepy. Halloween is still my favorite holiday.

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4/7/2013 09:05:34 am

Oh dear, whatever is going on seems very ominous. Such an atmospheric scary excerpt - well done!

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Danielle Forrest
4/7/2013 12:38:32 pm

This snippet is right at the end of the book and I wanted a scene that would sort of hint at a conflict from the second book.

God, I love the words people are using to describe this snippet. Ominous, creepy, chilling!

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4/7/2013 11:57:05 am

Wow! Totally creeped me out! Well done!

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4/8/2013 02:50:28 pm

Creepy good! Great tension too.

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Danielle Forrest
4/9/2013 01:10:23 pm

Thanks, Cindy (and Sharon!). Now I just have to keep the creepy going for next week. <taps fingers together in a Mr. Burns type of way> What shall I choose this time?

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