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A dirk’s edge caressed his throat and a woman straddled his chest, eliminating most of his capacity to breathe.  He was afraid to breathe, to move, but strangely he was not afraid of her.  She was his enemy and yet something in those eyes eliminated all fear.  They were like silk, brown silk.  Like smooth dark chocolate awaiting the chance to be tossed into a mouth.  A smile streaked across her face which he was certain was at least partially because she had just killed a man and yet her eyes calmed him.  If there had been a speck of evil glistening in those eyes, it disappeared as her smile widened.  She was an angel.


Read the serialized version of Forever After from the beginning: Chapter 1.

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3/16/2013 12:32:31 pm

Intriguing that he can be so confident that she won't kill him that he doesn't fear her. Maybe he's too captivated by her to think clearly. With those eyes, I wouldn't blame him.

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Danielle Forrest
3/16/2013 01:20:12 pm

I think it's a little bit he's captivated by her and a little bit that he's still alive. If she wanted him dead, he'd already be dead like his friend. I love this scene. Makes me smile.

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3/16/2013 08:08:44 pm

Nicely done!
Reminds me of an old song...
"You look like and angel,
Talk like an angel,
Walk like an angel...but,
You're the devil in disguise!"

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:33:02 am

Thanks.

And for the curious, the song he mentioned: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=judcSt6HBvo&noredirect=1

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3/16/2013 10:04:19 pm

Good thing he's the hero of the story (I assume?), or he'd be bleeding out right now! :)

Let's hope she feels the same way about him . . .

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:30:23 am

Nope, he's not the hero. He doesn't actually show up until about 2/3rds the way through the book. He is an important character, though, and he'll be around for a while to come.

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3/17/2013 01:12:41 am

I hope he's got good instincts. Nice snippet.

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:31:44 am

Thanks. And of course he's got good instincts. He's a werewolf! Not that you'd know that from the snippet. This was my first time participating in WeWriWa and wasn't sure exactly how to go about it.

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3/17/2013 01:34:46 am

I don't know. Oh boy, he might be in all kinds of trouble. Totally intriguing.

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:34:02 am

Thanks, glad you liked it. I love this scene. I had to cut it down a bit to fit 8 sentences, but it's still one of my favorites.

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3/17/2013 01:57:51 am

Beautifully descriptive, l loved the way you described her eyes, very poetic!

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:34:57 am

Oh, I love waxing poetic. Not sure if it's a good habit or a bad one at times. ;-)

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3/17/2013 02:58:09 am

"A dirk’s edge caressed his throat and a woman straddled his chest" - love this first part!

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3/17/2013 03:01:40 am

Interesting mix of elements in what he sees...intriguing. Terrific snippet!

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3/17/2013 03:30:40 am

Very interesting excerpt! Love your style. I'll certainly be back for more! :)

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 03:36:25 am

Thanks! Well, you can certainly check out the serial of the novel, which I have on my website. It's not a final draft, but I've got the first 3 chapters and part of the 4th up so far.

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3/17/2013 03:57:41 am

I love how you describe her smile after she's killed someone. Very mysterious character, you have there. ;)

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Danielle Forrest
3/17/2013 04:10:35 am

And she's not even the main character! But she has become my favorite character in the book. She's a vampire hunter turned vampire and it was not a smooth transition. She's so complex and hard, but rewarding to write.

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3/17/2013 04:00:33 am

Can't really add anything new from the other comments - beautiful description & I hope the guy has REALLY good instincts. :-)

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3/17/2013 04:11:09 am

Strong description, though his mindset might not be the clearest to determine if she's an angel or not, lol.

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3/17/2013 04:22:06 am

For his sake, he'd better be right.

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3/17/2013 04:47:47 am

I love the atmosphere you've created. It's dark, creepy, sexy, and appealing all at the same time. Great snippet.

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Danielle Forrest
3/20/2013 12:36:32 pm

Love the comment.

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Kate Warren
3/17/2013 05:28:27 am

Interesting combination of elements. You've fit so much into these eight sentences. I hope she's as good as he seems to think she is.

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3/17/2013 06:21:59 am

I loved the first sentence and the setup of the scene. It dragged me right in, Danielle.

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3/17/2013 06:33:04 am

Intriguing description. Great snippet!

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3/17/2013 08:55:08 am

Wow! Great descriptive scene. More please. :)

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Danielle Forrest
3/20/2013 12:35:42 pm

Aw, just hold your horses... ;-)

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3/17/2013 09:20:01 am

Really like this one! This line in particular grabbed me: "He was afraid to breathe, to move, but strangely he was not afraid of her."

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3/17/2013 09:43:56 am

Welcome to WeWriWa, Danielle. :-) Fascinating snippet. Loved the descriptive passage about the eyes. Looking forward to the next one.

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Danielle Forrest
3/20/2013 12:34:56 pm

Thanks for the wonderful welcome!

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3/17/2013 09:48:43 am

Whoa! That was intense. I love the sentence about her eyes being like chocolate about to be tossed in his mouth. Love that imagery!

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3/17/2013 02:19:02 pm

Very well written. Very descriptive. He must see something in her not to be afraid.

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3/18/2013 04:19:36 am

Ha! Never trust an angel with a dirk at your throat. There are dark angels too. ;-) Good post!

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Danielle Forrest
3/20/2013 12:34:14 pm

Dark angels... yes, I've always had a fondness for dark angels. I love the dichotomy of it. This book is all about dichotomies.

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Danielle Forrest
3/20/2013 12:33:05 pm

Thanks everyone for all the wonderful comments! I only hope you like next week's snippet just as much!

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4/6/2013 02:05:49 pm

I love seeing her through his eyes. What great perspective!

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