Hello, my freaky Darlings.  So this is my second try at WeWriWa/Snippet Sundays.  Hope you enjoy this snippet from Forever After as much as you did last week's.

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The ride was uncomfortable, painfully so.  Half a dozen times along the way, Justine imagined herself flinging the car door open at sixty miles an hour and jumping out, rolling along the side of the road until she finally came to a stop. In her head, the door resisted almost beyond her ability to hold it open. It nearly took off a limb when she leapt out. When she hit the ground, she imagined the impact on her body. Something would probably break so pain would slice through her like a knife. She would, of course, get right back up and take off at a dead run but, even in her imaginings, she was trapped because every time it ended with the BS catching her.

She glared at her captor once more but the monster was oblivious.


Read the serialized version of Forever After from the beginning: Chapter 1.

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3/23/2013 10:00:50 pm

So much strength in this snippet and she didn't even move. Fascinating read.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 12:02:58 am

Thanks, I was working on my editing and came across this one. Just knew it would be good for a snippet. I think it gets across Justine's tension perfectly.

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3/23/2013 11:33:21 pm

Terrific peek into her mind. I love that she's imagining escaping. Tells me how badly she wants to. Excellent snippet.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 12:04:51 am

I think I got the idea from the long, long trips my family used to take. I would always imagine riding alone beside the car on a dirt bike, taking the hills and valleys like a madman.

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3/23/2013 11:44:44 pm

Her imagination is wonderfully, terribly detailed. I like how you pull it around in the end to the calmness of the monster.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 12:06:21 am

Thanks. As the story progresses, she'll be at times enraged and at other impressed with the "monster's" stoicism.

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3/23/2013 11:45:49 pm

Oh wow. Rife with tension. I love this snippet. Very intriguing.

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3/24/2013 12:07:54 am

A very powerful snippet. I was riveted by how she played out each scenario so vividly in her mind. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:06:02 am

I think you just gave me an idea for what next week's snippet will be...

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3/24/2013 12:26:09 am

I loved your extract so much I went over to read the first chapter... there's nothing like following the leader to set up the tension.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:06:51 am

I'm glad you liked it so much! I update the serial twice a week so stay tuned!

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3/24/2013 12:35:47 am

Love how she plans the escape, even down to the feeling of the car door open at 60mph. She must really be desperate to get away! Tense 8.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:12:41 am

Oh, she is. She has been a hostage of the "monster" in the seat next to her for weeks, tied to a chair when conscious, released only when she had no opportunity for escape.

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3/24/2013 01:25:07 am

Awesome descriptions and internal.
~Summer
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3/24/2013 02:15:58 am

Great sneak peek into her thoughts. She hasn't given up! Enjoyed the snippet and anxiously await for more. :)

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:14:40 am

One of the wonderful and frustrating things about this character is how stubborn and unyielding she can be. She never gives up. She eventually begrudgingly adapts, but she never gives up.

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3/24/2013 03:36:45 am

Tons of great momentum in this snippet. Well done!

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3/24/2013 04:12:58 am

Oh wow. This girl has quite the imagination. Loved this.

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3/24/2013 04:16:00 am

I wonder why she wants to leap out of the car? It's my first visit to your site. I like the conflicting feelings she's experiencing.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:15:47 am

I said it in an earlier comment but she's been hostage to the person sitting next to her for weeks. The person is her mortal enemy, represents everything she despises.

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3/24/2013 04:32:01 am

Great use of deep point of view. Loved it!

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3/24/2013 04:53:49 am

Interesting imaginings she's having. Excellent skills of analysis. Too bad she's certain she wouldn't get away anyway. But then it might be better not to annoy him by trying to escape.

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3/24/2013 05:02:48 am

You did an amazing job using her imagination to showcase her desperation and despair. Well done!

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3/24/2013 05:06:03 am

Wow. Great deep POV. I've often wondered what it would be like to jump out of a moving vehicle. Now I know. Ouch. I'll stay in the car, thank you very much.

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:20:56 am

I've often wondered as well. Interesting little tidbit - there's a reason cars are made with the doors opening the way they do. If they open in the opposite direction like they did once with much older models, the force of the wind at decent speed would just about be enough to rip the door off its hinges.

It's possible to leap from a moving vehicle relatively unscathed. It takes skill. You have to roll just right. You have to land on a smooth surface. You have to be wearing clothes that protect your skin. You have to hope you're not landing in the next lane right in front of another car. But the faster the car is going, the greater the risk.

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3/24/2013 05:11:50 am

lovely read. The line at the end about the captor was particularly strong.

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3/24/2013 05:16:09 am

She's in a bad spot! Very tense.

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3/24/2013 05:53:27 am

Wow! jumping out of a car going 60 miles an hour doesn't sound good.This has so much tension and your snippet makes me have to tune in next week. What a great job. Loved it. :-)

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:21:41 am

Thanks. Look forward to hearing from you next week.

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3/24/2013 08:29:23 am

Wow, I missed last week, but this really makes me what to know what's going on and who this monster is!

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Danielle Forrest
3/24/2013 09:23:19 am

The monster is a vampire and the hostage is a vampire hunter that tried to kill her.

Now the better question is who's the real bad guy? Dun dun dun...

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3/31/2013 04:33:36 am

Excellent description of her 'imagined' escape.

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